CommentsDevious CommentsThank you. I normally am better with my grammar but I wasn't writing this in the best state of mind. I will correct it as soon as I am able, since I hate having any kinds of flaws in my writing lol Thank you, again. I'm glad that I can continue to write poems that invoke emotions or understanding in others
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You are missing a few grammatical marks, but since I don't have much of a history of looking at your literature, I don't know if that's just your style of writing or not. So that doesn't exactly matter, though a few commas and periods might make it easier to read, or flow a bit better. But, the question mark after 'What am I supposed to do?' can be removed, since the question continues in the next two lines.
I think a lot of people can relate to this poem, which makes it easier to read in itself. The confusion of wanting someone, but not wanting them at the same time. The emotions that are too mixed up to sort out so you feel better. Letting something wonderful slip through your fingers, even if you do anything to hold on tight.
All in all, a beautiful read. I loved it, and I thank you for writing such a wonderful poem.